Cut the antithesis density on the organisation landing page - #3
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`profile/README.md` carried six `rather than` figures and one `X, not Y` in 802
words, 8.7 antitheses per 1000, and that density is the tell the fleet text
survey measures. This is the most visible page the organisation has, so a
reader meets the figure before they meet the product.
Four sites are rewritten and two `rather than` figures are kept, the two where
the contrast is the information: the design case against the error case, and a
preset per deficiency against one blanket mode. The group of three that opened
the page is extended to four, so each image now stands for one row of the speed
table below it.
git grep -cF 'rather than' -- profile/README.md
profile/README.md:2
Nothing else moves: no em dash and no en dash enters the file, measured with
`git grep -nP '\x{2014}'` and `\x{2013}`, both silent before and after.
Answers operations issue 896.
Signed-off-by: Nils Lehnen <30603423+iderex@users.noreply.github.com>
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profile/README.mdis the organisation's public landing page, and the fleet textsurvey found one thing in it: antithesis density. Seven figures over 802 words,
8.7 per 1000, which is the threshold of the tell list. Formally the page was
already clean - no em dash, no label scaffold, no emoji, no self-reference.
What changed, and what it prevents
Six
rather thanfigures and oneX, not Yin a page of 802 words read as amannerism, and a mannerism is what a stranger meets before they meet the product.
Four sites are rewritten:
row of the speed table under it, including the play-to-first-frame row that
had no image
sharing a core rather than a codebasesays what is shared instead of what isnot
a failed build, not a slow onebecomeshas failedthe table says so rather than letting you find out after installingbecomes aplain sentence
Two
rather thanfigures are kept on purpose, and they are the two where thecontrast carries the information: missing artwork as a design case against an
error case, and a preset per colour deficiency against one blanket accessible
mode. A sixth site, the security-reporting paragraph, was rewritten as well to
reach the count, and it keeps the instruction it carried.
Measured at this head
Six before, two after. The dash commands are silent before and after this change
and are quoted so the negative stays negative.
The means
Markdown, unchanged. The artefact is a rendered profile page GitHub reads from
one fixed path, so the format is forced and held to its minimum, and nothing new
enters the repository.
WHY THIS BRANCH AND NOT THE FIRST ONE
Pull request 2 carries the identical tree and one defect: its commit has no DCO
sign-off, so
Verify DCO sign-off on every commitrefused it. The repair is atrailer in the message, which cannot be added to a pushed commit without
rewriting it, and I do not force-push. So the same change was committed again
with
-son this branch and pull request 2 is closed with that reason in itsbody. Both heads hold the same bytes:
WHAT THIS DOES NOT DISCHARGE
The fourth item on operations issue 896 asks that the text be read aloud once.
That is a person's act and nothing in this change is evidence of it, so it is
left unticked rather than reported as done. Operations issue 896 stays open for
that item alone; the three measurable items above are met at this head.
No second reader was available on this board tonight. The commands stand in place
of one.